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Imagine Imagine: You are sitting at your home you receive a phone call telling you to evacuate the house within 10 minutes to be bombed . Now in these minutes you have to goodbye every thing .Your memories, your books ,the photos of your lovers on the wall , All the things that you owned including your finances and your clothes .Now the first thing you will do that shouting to your family to leave the home,and you will run to bring your papers if you have mind to remember it . then what? you can take last look around you and get out fast as you can to watch every thing turn to fire and dust .can you even imagine that.? correct please

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Imagine: You are sitting at your home when you receive a phone call telling you to evacuate the house within 10 minutes or to be bombed . Now in these minutes you have to goodbye to everything .Your memories, your books ,the photos of your lovers loved ones on the wall. ,
All the things that you owned including your finances money and your clothes .Now the first thing you will do that is shouting to your family to leave the house home,and you will run to bring take your important papers if you have mind the wits to remember it . then what? you can take one  last look around you and get out fast as you can to watch everything turn to fire and dust .can you even imagine that.?

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Hello Aliaa,

Interesting piece - just some suggested corrections from me :)

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Imagine: You are sitting at your home, and you receive a phone call. You are told to evacuate from the house within 10 minutes, because your house is to be bombed. Now in these minutes you have to say goodbye to everything: your memories, your books, wall photos of your loved ones, to all the things you own including your money and your clothes. Now the first thing you will do is you shout to your family to leave the home, and you will run to take your papers if you have in mind to remember them. Then what? You can take last glance around you and get out as fast as you can and then watch how everything turns into fire and dust. Can you even imagine that?

 

 

(If I got an idea right)

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I'm writing about what happen in Gaza.
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I just wonder whether you are writing about something that you have been through yourself? Or is it allusion to something what is happening

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