IELTS essay training: Introduction #1. What do you think?

TASK:
More and more people move from areas where they grew up to find jobs.
Does this development have advantages or disadvantages?

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After finishing the university young people faces the two choices: to stay in their city or to relocate for a better job opportunityies and as a consequence a higher salaryies and more prestigious perspective career. While this decision has negative psychological aspects, my opinion is that moving away this development makes a person become more flexible and adaptable adaptive to a changing world. that This can only be an advantage.

IELTS essay training: Introduction #1. What do you think?

TASK:
More and more people move from areas where they grew up to find jobs.
Does this development have advantages or disadvantages?

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After finishing the university young people faces the choice: to stay in their city or to relocate for a better job opportunities and as a consequence higher salaries and more perspective career. While this decision has negative psychological aspects my opinion is that this development makes a person be more flexible and adaptive to changing world that can only be an advantage.

After finishing university, young people face the choice; to stay in their city or to relocate in order to receive better job opportunities. The consequences of this is there are now higher salaries and better career prospects. While this decision has some negative psychological aspects; my opinion is that this development makes a person more flexible and adaptive to a changing world that can only be an advantage.