The Japanese retreat

It's in winter now in Melbourne, a bit chilly outside and about 11 degrees. It is good time to go to the  springs and the spa. There are some famous hot springs places in Melbourne where I had have been before. This time I picked up ( picked up means to get something .. as in I will pick up some fruit while I am at the store, or pick up something from the floor that dropped or pick up trash that is around the room... as in to iift up something that should not be there)  a Japanese style mineral springs to visit. This mineral spring retreat is 50 minutes far away from home. There is a spectacular Japanese garden with a pool and waterfall, We booked a package which includes an inculde outdoor Authentic Japanese Onsen for private bathing, spa therapies and a delicious Yum-cha at a Japanese style tea room. We will have a very good time at the retreat.

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The Japanese retreat

It's in winter now in Melbourne and a bit chilly outside; and about 11 degrees. It is a good time to go to the hot springs and spa. There are some famous hot springs places in Melbourne where that I have been to before. This time I pick up want to go to a Japanese style mineral springs to visit. This mineral spring retreat is 50 minutes far away from home. There is a spectacular Japanese garden with pool and waterfall. We booked a package that inculdes an outdoor authentic Japanese onsen for private bathing, spa therapies and a delicious Yum-cha at a Japanese style tea room. We will have a very good time at the retreat.

Well done! It sounds like such a relaxing and nice time. :)