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In the past, many people had skills such as making their own clothes and doing repairs to things in the house. In many countries, nowadays, skills like these are disappearing.
Why do you think this change is happening?
How far is this situation true in your country?

We make our identity in the society, with the skills we own have. Skills can be of any type. From artist to an actor, from musician to a director everybody has their own level of expertise. There are so many people who can make their own clothes and many who are willing to repair small faults in their place by themselves. Still, people are forgetting the importance of being an expert in their art.
In the past, many people had skills such as making their own clothes and repairing things in the house. Nowadays, people are getting modernized. They are heading towards the 21st century where such things doesn’t don't matter to anyone. Today, we can get ready made clothes, automatic gadgets, and modern machines from the market. Their greed of getting rich and wealthy is making them lazy and money minded. The majority of the population don’t want to get involved in making things and repairing things. They believe it’s just a waste of time. “Demand is equal to supply”. As the demand is rapidly increasing, industries are manufacturing more and more goods in order to fulfill the needs. The young generation are way far from being an experts in anything. They just know how to spend money and get things to work.
This can be rectified and solved by raising awareness. Parents should not give money to children’s for unnecessary things. Rather, encourage them that, if something goes wrong to try to and fix it, instead of replacing it or getting something new. This way children can learn the importance of being an expert or having skills in them.
The situation in my country are is the same as in others. People like luxurious things. I always try to explain to them people the importance of being proficient with basic skills. However, we have a phrase, “Big thing comes in small packet”. Therefore, if every individual try then we can bring a revolution.

I think you did a good job but a couple of small points:

Making clothes and doing repairs are basic skills for self-sufficiency. 

Even if one does not want to do for themselves, knowing how to do them at least will keep them from being taken advantage of by others.

One does not need to be an expert or be proficient at a particular skill.