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IELTS TASK I The bar chart illustrates the estimated trends of jeans which will be sold in the next year for two companies in Turkey, while the pie chart shows the percentage of anticipated market share for both and other companies. It is anticipated that purchases of pairs of jeans at Mango company will start at 150000 pairs at the biginning of the period. This number will remain stable form January to April and then will begin to increase slighly from July to November at the same number as about 450000 pairs fo jeans. However, the number of sales of jeans will rise a little to 600000 in the final month. Moving on jack & Jones company, the estimated sales of jeans will begin a higher level to mango company, at just 450000 pairs of jeans. This number though will be decreased markedly in the following month, at approximately 250000 and then will go up gradually to 400000 in June. Although, this number of sales will remain constant for three months but this will rise to account for the highest number of sales of jeans, at around 950 thousand pairs of jeans in December. As we can see in the pie chart, the percentage of projected trade share at the end of the next year for mango and jack&Jones companies will be 20% and 30%, respectively. Those percentages show that the forecast of the sales for Jack&Jones company will be higher than for Mango company.

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ELTS TASK I

The bar chart illustrates the estimated trends in the amount of jeans which will be sold in the next year for two companies in Turkey, while the pie chart shows the percentage of the anticipated market share for each of these companies, and other companies in relation to all other companies in the same market during this time.

It is anticipated that purchases of pairs of jeans at Mango company will start at 150000 pairs at the beginning of the period. This number will remain stable from January to April and then will begin to increase slighly steadily from July to November ('May to August'?), at the same number as reaching about 450000 pairs of jeans. However, the number of sales of jeans will rise a little to 600000 in the final month.

Moving on to Jack & Jones company (Or just, 'Moving on to Jack and Jones,...), the estimated sales of jeans will begin at a higher level to (Or 'higher level than') Mango company, at just (If it's higher than other companies then you probably shouldn't use 'just'.) 450000 pairs of jeans. This number though will be decreased markedly in the following month, at to approximately 250000, and then will go up gradually to reach 400000 in June. Although, It is predicted that this number of sales will remain constant for three months but this then will rise to account for the highest number of sales of jeans of either of the companies during the period considered, at to around 950000 thousand pairs of jeans in December.

As we can see in the pie chart, the percentage of the projected trade share at the end of the next year for the Mango and Jack&Jones companies will be 20% and 30%, respectively. Those percentages show that the forecast of the sales for Jack&Jones company will be higher than for Mango company.

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I took much time to do it for improving my writing skill so I didn't copy and paste certainly. :) Anyway, if you find out any incorrect points, just let me know. Thank you in advance.
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Good article. Hope you didn't do copy paste :)

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