my essay about goldilocks, what do you think? part 1

Goldilocks
An anthropomorphical bear family lived together in a little cottage. One day when they are were going to take have their breakfast, they feel felt (noticed might be better?) it was too hot, so they decided to go out for a while and visit their other animal neighbors, leaving their bowls to cooling.
Meanwhile a (life scientist biologist?) that had been watching the family for a long time, appeared and she crept up into the dwelling, caring little if she broke into that she was breaching the bears' privacy. she poured a tranquilizing potion into the bears' bowls of food a tranquilizing potion, then go went to the bedrooms and put some snares under every bed's pillows.
While goldilocks was waiting for the bears to come home and his her plan happen (the english expression is "a plan to hatch"); which was for the bears to eat breakfast and do the calming effect and investigate when they go to fell asleep to catch her to investigate.
But the family of bears take took a long time and Goldilocks fell asleep. When they arrived they would continued with their breakfast, dad sniffed out the tranquilizer into his bowl, and asking asked Mom and son if they also had nosed smelt it. taking an affirmative answer.(They had/They answered they did sounds more natural) 
The son sniffed an unpleasant odor, addressing looking around the room, they also realized noticed the traps under the pillows and goldilocks sleeping.
Goldilocks woke up and realized the presence of bears had come home. She jumped, terrified, and tried to run, but the dad and mom bears caught and devoured her.
In this story, unlike fairy tales with happy endings to which we are accustomed, we change the perspective (the perspective is changed sounds better) and it makes us understand a moral in a different, seemingly cruel way. and seemingly cruel moral.
In this story arises the morals content situations about ambition, selfishness, hypocrisy and indifference.
In this version we can see how instead of referring to Goldilocks as a tender and Beautiful curious girl, she is taught described to us as a selfish biologist, and blinded by ambition which who gets into (breaks into maybe?) the house of a family of bears with the purpose to of experimenting with and gaining fame.
In this version, unlike the fairy tale version, emotions become different. As in the (original) fairy tale, the reader is moved by the presence of bears and as their tremendous family love, enabling them to accept the missing girl.
Also in this version, the reader is transformed with offered/given/substituted with the mentality of a child in each of the characters, and fantasy vibe/atmosphere in subtle ways; you are carrying moving through/going along the story through making and you feel part of it.

Good work! :) Try to make your sentences shorter, you put too much information in one sentence and it makes you make mistakes...