Computer games

Very often, when my brother plays computer games in his room, his friend comes to him. I open the door and call him, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says, that, as a matter of fact, he wants to invite my brother to the party to the country. The five people are going to go together with them. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says, that these boys are really very nice people. They don't drink and smoke, they play golf and listen good music. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says, that these boys know a lot of funny stories and speak English well, for(what do you mean here?), they often go to England. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says, that they want to help to my brother. They are going to invite him to their office, because people make a lot of money there. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.

I guess that only native speakers can make really reasonable corrections, so I just mentioned the most obvious mistakes i noticed. But this text looks really unusual so I couldn't pass by. What is it?)

Здравствуйте! Это за исправления - то за возможные стильные улучшения,

Computer games

Very often, when my brother plays computer games in his room, his friend comes over /over for him. I open the door and call him, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says that, as a matter of fact, he wants to invite my brother to the party out in the country. Five people are going to go together (with them). I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says that these boys are really very nice people. They don't drink and/or smoke, they play golf and listen to good music. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says that these boys know a lot of funny stories and speak English well, as they often go to England. / since they often go to/visit England / because they often etc...

I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.
His friend says that they want to help to my brother. They are going to invite him to their office, because people make a lot of money there. I call my brother, but he doesn't answer.

Мне нравится; это - почти похоже на поэму!