Practising my writing skills - IELTS

IELTS Task: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college, in the letter:

1- Describe the situation.
2.- Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work.
3.- Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Counsellor:

I am writting this letter to complain about the situation that is happening with my roomate. I have been sharing this room with another student for one month. At first, everything was alright, but the situation has changed in the last three weeks.

When he started to be my roomate I thougt it was going to be fine, but suddenly he turned into such a mean person. He is always making a mess, listening to loud music and one time he even smoked inside the room. I've tried my best to fix the situation and find a way to share the room in a peaceful way but he is not cooperating. Now the situation is out of control and as everyday passes it is just getting worse, so I decided to write this letter in order to solve it.

Moreover, since I asked him to make a "roommate agreement" for the benefit of both of us, he is just doing the opposite. I don't think he really wants to study here, it seems to be that he has been pushed by his parents to study at this College, and maybe he is not to blame for this situation.

For these reasons, I would like to ask to you for an arrangement that would work this situation out. If it is possible, I would like to be moved to another room, I do not have a problem with sharing a room with another person but if you are able to find me a single room it would be perfect.

Thank you for your attention,

Yours faithfully/ Best wishes/ Regards

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Comment:

You are clearly a high level English learner and write generally accurately and with a good style.

Taregt for improvement:

I've picked up a few minor spelling mistakes, make sure you check for these. 

Practising my writing skills - IELTS

IELTS Task: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college, in the letter:

1- Describe the situation.
2.- Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work.
3.- Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Counselor:

I am writting this letter as a complaint about the situation that is happening with my roomate. I have been sharing my room with a student from xxxx since one last month. At first, everything was allright alright, but from during the last three weeks it changed.

When he started to be as my roomate, I thougt thought it was going to be fine, but suddenly he turned into such a mean person(sounds unnatural...consider this instead...the situation deteriorated). He is always making a mess in the room, listening music out very loudly and even one time he even smoked inside the room. I really made my best effort to fix the situation and find a way to share the room in a paceful   peaceful way, but he is not cooperating. By this time Right now the situation is out of control and everyday that passes by it is jus just getting gets worse, so I decided to write this letter in order to solve it.
 
Moreover, since I told him to make some "convenience rules house rules" for the benefits of both, and he is just doing just the opposite. I think he does not want to study here, and it seems to be that he has been pushed for by his parents to study at this College, and maybe he is not  to blame fot for this.

For these reasons, I would like to ask to you for an a different roommate arrangement. that would work this situation out. If it is at all possible, I would like to be moved to another room. I do not have problems with share sharing it with another person but if you are able to find me a single room it that would be perfect.

Thankful for your attention and waiting for your answer,

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Practising my writing skills - IELTS

IELTS Task: You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college, in the letter:

1- Describe the situation.
2.- Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work.
3.- Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

--
Dear Counselor:

I am writing this letter to complain about a problem I have been experiencing with my roomate. I have been sharing my room with a student from xxxx for one month. At first, everything was alright, during the last three weeks things have changed.

At first I thought it was going to be fine, but suddenly he turned into such a mean person. He is always making a mess in the room, listening to loud music out loud and one time he even he smoked inside the room. I really did my best effort to fix the situation and find a way to share the room in a peaceful way but he is not cooperating. Now the situation is out of control and it gets worse every day, so I decided to write this letter in order to solve it.

Moreover, since I told him to agree to some "house rules" for the benefit of both of us, he is just doing the opposite. I think he does not want to study here. It seems to be that he has been pushed by his parents to study at this college, and maybe he is not to blame for this.

For these reasons, I would like to ask to you for an arrangement that resolve these difficulties. If it is possible, I would like to be moved to another room. I do not have any problems with sharing it with another person, but if you are able to find me a single room it would be perfect.

Thank for your attention. I look forward to your response.

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