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A diary 2 In China,today is Children's Day.My parents go out to buy some presents for my little brother.I just stay at home to finish my homework.I am a little bit disappointed because I just find a friend who comes from Thailand. Many people don't approve my friend requests.I am a student of a senior high school.There will be a college entrance examination on June 7th.All of them are trying to do their best.Although I am not in favor of this way to select talent ，we have no choice but to defeat it.They are heroes.They deserve applsuse. I believe they can be admitted from their dream colleges.May god bless them.Two years later,I will do the same matter.My family is normal.Only in this way can I get closer to my dream and make my dream come true.Cheer up ！Besides,may children all over the world be happy！

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A diary 2

In China, today is Children's Day. My parents go went out to buy some presents for my little brother. I just stayed at home to finish my homework. I am a little bit disappointed, because I just find found a friend who comes from Thailand. However, many people don't approve accept my friend requests. I am a student of at a senior high school and there will be a college entrance examination on June 7th. All of them the students are trying to do their best. Although I am not in favor of this way to select talent, we have no choice but to defeat it. These students are heroes and they deserve applause. I believe they can be admitted from to their dream colleges. May God bless them. Two years later, I will do the same matter. My family is normal. Only in this way can I get closer to my dream and make my dream it come true. Cheer up! Besides, many children all over the world be are happy!

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A diary 2

In China,today is Children's Day.My parents go out to buy some presents for my little brother.I just stay at home to finish my homework.I am a little bit disappointed because I just find a friend who comes from Thailand. Many people don't approve my friend requests.I am a student of a senior high school.There will be a college entrance examination on June 7th.All of them are trying to do their best.Although I am not in favor of this way to select talent ，we have no choice but to defeat it.They are heroes.They deserve applause. I believe they can be admitted from their dream colleges.May god bless them.Two years later,I will do the same matter.My family is normal.Only in this way can I get closer to my dream and make my dream come true.Cheer up ！Besides,may children all over the world be happy！

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A diary 2

In China,today is Children's Day.My parents go out to buy some presents for my little brother.I just stay at home to finish my homework.I am a little bit disappointed because I just find a friend who comes from Thailand. Many people don't approve my friend requests.I am a student of a senior high school.There will be a college entrance examination on June 7th.All of them are trying to do their best.Although I am not in favor of this type of selection /  way to select a talent ，we have no choice but to defeat it.They are heroes.They deserve applsuse. I believe they can be admitted from their dream colleges.May god bless them.Two years later,I will do the same matter.My family is normal.Only in this way can I get closer to my dream and make my dream come true.Cheer up ！Besides,may children all over the world be happy！

 

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