Morality is out of the world.
Everybody in this world seeks his or her profit in doing any work.why dont people do some of the work for just helping others.People are becoming more and more selfish.People are not sad because of their problems they are more sad by the happiness of other.For example if two best friends in a school sit for their finals and one scored 1st rank and other scored 2nd rank then the 2nd stored student doesn't feel happy of scoring 2nd rank .he will feel sad because his friend scored 1st rank .What is happening oh jesus. Today brother is killing his own brother for money.No one tries to do a bit of work without seeking any profit.People become the slave of materialistic pleasure .my soul is shaterred by looking the people of todays world .
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Morality is out of the world.
Everybody in this world seeks his or her profit inwhen doing any work. Why dont people do some of the work for just just for the sake of helping others? People are becoming more and more selfish. People are not sad because of their problems, they are more sad by because of the happiness of others. For example, if two best friends in a school sit for their finals and one scored 1st rank and other scored 2nd rank, then the 2nd stored student doesn't feel happy of about scoring 2nd rank. He will feel sad because his friend scored 1st rank. What is happening? oh jesus. Today brother is killing his own brother for money. No one tries to do a bit of work without seeking any profit. People have become the slave of materialistic pleasure .My soul is shaterred by looking at the people of todays world .
Good article - watch your capital letters. Good use of vocabulary, but maybe a bit repetive in places. Excellent spelling.
Tip for writing: Do not use phrases such as 'Oh God!' or 'Oh Jesus'. These are not always deemed as polite, even in spoken English. NB: Oh God! May be used in poetry.
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Morality is out of the/this world.
Everybody in this world seeks his or her profit in/when doing any work. Why don't people do some of the work for just for the sake of helping others. People are becoming more and more selfish. People are not sad because of their problems, they are more sad by because of the happiness of others. For example, if two best friends in a school sit for their finals and one scored 1st rank and the other scored 2nd rank, then the 2nd stored scoring/place student doesn't feel happy of in/about scoring 2nd rank. Instead, he will feel sad because his friend scored 1st rank. What is happening? oh jesus. Today brother is killing his own brother for money. No one tries to do a bit of work without seeking any profit. People have become the slaves of materialistic pleasure. My soul is shatterred by from looking at the people of today's world.
Nice work! Just be careful with the religious references. Also, just a tip, spaces after full stops not before. Keep working on it!
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You wrote "Oh Jesus" so I presume that you know some stories from the Bible. Go back and look at the story of Cain and Abel. What you describe is not new.
Look around more closely and you will see many people who help others and seek nothing for themselves. If the people you know are self-centered, find new friends.
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You are great !!!
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Don't worry about it too much, it is good to do youself.（别在意太多，做好自己就好）
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