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Could anybody help me to fix this ielts essay and give me some feedbacks about my essay's structure? Question: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Dicuss both views and give your opinion. Here my answer: Many people think that innate talents cannot be taught while others believe these talents can be created by training or teaching methods. In this essay, both views are discussed but I think that natural talents cannot be trained or learnt even if there is a good teacher. In one hand, some people believe that a child can be taught to be a talented person. This statement may be based on the truth that in some areas, practicing skills are more important than gifts. Aerobics, for example, is a sport that might not need much talent and by teaching or training, children can gradually improve their gifts. However, it is obvious that education methods are not applicable to some areas. People working in art like musicians or singers are good examples. If a person has no natural talents in music, no school can teach them to be an excellent artist. In other words, innate talents cannot be taught and obviously just with teaching methods, another Mozart or Beethoven is hardly found. Personally, I totally agree that some people are born with their natural talents and these gifts cannot be taught by any education methods. Nevertheless, without regular train, no one can keep their innate talents forever. It is certainly true that many people lose their ability due to the lack of practicing and therefore, they cannot be excellent sport players of singers. In conclusion, to acquire some certain skills, people usually need to be trained by education but without talent, people in some areas such as arts or sports cannot become excellent.

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