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Could anyone help me to correct this essay? The map compares the Lakeside in term of changes over a period of 9 years from 2000 to 2009. Overall, a number of reconstructions could be found easily in the North of the River. For instance, the Residential area near the river bank was replaced by a shopping centre and the Art centre was also turned into a cinema which located next to a school. While the other Residential Area nearby was still remained, the old town was changed into several offices and a University also was establised there. Another change was the replacement of the derelic warehouse by a new car park along this side. To the South of the river, some slight changes also occurred. The residential area had disappeared to substitute for the expansion of the Industrial complex. In addition, the original shape of the lake was not remained but altered a smaller pond. In short, within 9 years, the Lake side area has been witnessing significant changes

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Could anyone help me to correct this essay?

The map compares the Lakeside in terms of changes over a period of 9 years, from 2000 to 2009.
Overall, a number of reconstructions could can be easily found easily in the north of the river. For instance, the residential area near the river bank was replaced by a shopping centre, and the art centre was also turned into a cinema which is located next to a the school. While the other nearby residential area nearby was still remained stayed, the old town was changed into several offices and a university also was establised there. Another change was the replacement of the derelic warehouse by a new car park along this side.
To the south of the river, some slight changes also occurred. The residential area had disappeared, to substitute substituting for the expansion of the industrial complex. In addition, the original shape of the lake was not remained kept, but alteredchanged into a smaller pond.
In short, within 9 years, the Lakeside area has been witnessing significant changes.

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Very good! Just be careful with capitalization errors. Otherwise, great essay!

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