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An impressive journey Last weekend, I went to Melbourne to visit my friend who has migrated there for 3 years. The first thing which really shocked me was that the temperature dropped abruptly when I arriving there. It was only 9 degrees centigrade, which were lower than 23 degrees in Brisbane. And I was wearing a T-shirt like a stupid tourist, standing at the pick-up area and waiting for my friends in the night. Fortunately, I got three sunny days although I still felt cold. My friends took me to several tourist attractions, which are quite beautiful that I haven't been there before. I love the view of city there because there are many green areas around the buildings. It looks cozy and fantastic! Every picture, which I took, looked beautiful that I didn't use any special camera lens. When I came back to Brisbane last night, I already started to miss there. I hope that I can migrate there in the future so that I can enjoy the beautiful scenes every day!

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An impressive journey

Last weekend I went to Melbourne to visit my friend who has lived there for 3 years.

The first thing that shocked me was that the temperature dropped abruptly when I arrived.

It was only 9 degrees centigrade, which than lower than the 23 degrees I left in Brisbane.

And I was wearing a T-shirt like a stupid tourist, standing at the pick-up area waiting for my friends in the night.

Fortunately I had three sunny days while there, although I still felt cold.

My friends took me to several tourist attractions that I had not seen before. They were quite beautiful.

I love the scenery of city. There are many green areas around the buildings.

It looks cozy and fantastic! Every picture I took looks beautiful and I didn't use any special camera lens.

When I came back to Brisbane last night I already started to miss it.

I hope that I can migrate there in the future so that I can enjoy the beautiful scenes every day!

 

 

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Last weekend I went to Melbourne to visit a friend who has lived there for 3 years. The first thing I noticed was the abrupt drop in temperature on arrival; it really shocked me. It was only 9 degrees Celsius and had been 23 when I left in Brisbane. And there I was wearing a T-shirt like a stupid tourist, standing at the pick-up area waiting for my friends in the night. Fortunately I had three sunny days while I was there, although I still felt cold. My friends took me to a few beautiful tourist attractions that I’d never visited before. I love the scenery of this city. There are many parks and green areas blended through the architecture which makes it feel cozy and interesting. Every picture I took turned out beautiful, and I didn't even use a special camera lens. I was already missing it when I returned to Brisbane last night. I hope that I can move there one day so that I can enjoy its beauty all the time.

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Melbourne is an impressive city indeed.
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墨尔本。。好羡慕你啊~

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