The Speech For 5 Minutes

Today, I did a presentation about education and the future. Although I had not made an effort much much effort, I had learned from TED indirectly. A lot of TED lectures of TED gave me affluent ways to speak and get attention from the audience. (I understand this, but it's a slightly odd way to phrase it - I would say something like "Watching a lot of TED lectures helped me speak in a fluid way and gain the audience's attention.")

So, preparing was not difficult. All I could take was I could only take 5 minutes., and I had to stop if the bell rings rang. I started my speech by telling the two persons' people's stories. Soon Then, I related told them with about my topic. Lastly, I wrapped it up with a well-known poetry poem.

One of my purposes (I think 'intentions' or 'aims' is a better word here) is was to get attention from the audience. I imagined how many students would do other things during my speech. Because the subject 'education' was so cliche, that it is natural for the students to daydream during the speech. I'd like them not to didn't want them to look at their phones. So, I chose to introduce the two famous persons people at the beginning.

Time passed so fast faster than I expected, so I couldn't tell the whole things say everything that I wanted to say., Anyway, but I delivered the main message, and organized my suggestions well.

Afterwards, the professor asked the colleagues (Perhaps 'asked the other students'? 'Colleagues' means that you work at a job together, rather than learn together) to review my speech.
One of them told me that I had better should use more big gestures, and put an emphasis on the main point.
That was exactly what I agreed. (Or "That was exactly what I thought", but "I agreed" works just fine) I am not used to using gestures or tones to attract people.
The professor also agreed with her, and said that that weakness was what I should fill up myself with focus on.

She did not forget to compliment me. She said that all things except that were very good.
She is going to see how I will overcome my weak points weaknesses.
I think I should stop nursing a sense of anxiety, which hastened me up made me speak faster (or "sped me up").
If I were to be calm down, I could deliver in a more impressive way.

This was very hard to correct - because you did a great job! I understood almost all of it straight away, and most of the corrections are not big mistakes, just very small points that help the English to flow and sound more natural.

The difference between 'persons' and 'people' is very subtle indeed, and many English speakers do not actually know the difference. 'Persons' as a plural is very rarely used though, so in general is better to only use 'People':

One person, two people.

One person's books, two people's books. 

Bravo, anyway!