I climb a mountain almost every week. It's not very far from my home, about 30kms away. I remember the first time I climbed it last year. It was early spring and kind of cold. There weren't any green leaves so at the top of the mountain I could see only gray and the stone steps below. I felt a little scared when I first looked down from the mountain top but now I am getting used to the height. Today I saw some pear and peach flowers. They were white and pink, so beautiful, just like colourful clouds when seen from far away. I will attach a photo of the flowers so that everyone can have a look. I will also keep a special one for the person who helps me by correcting this article.

There is a mountain about 30kms from my home that I climb almost every week. I recall it being kind of cold when I first went there in early spring of last year. There were no green leaves, and from the top all I could see was gray and the stone steps below. I had a slight sensation of acrophobia when I first looked down from the mountain but now it doesn’t bother me so much. Today I saw pear and peach flowers. They were white and pink and so beautiful, reminding me of colourful clouds in the stretching distance. I will attach a photo of the flowers for everyone to see and also keep one especially for the person who corrects this article.

I kept the first correction closer to your original form. In the second one I have played around a little with style and added some words you might like to explore for you vocabulary list. Neither correction is better than the other, they are just different. Whatever comparisons are made will hopefully help you on your journey of learning English. Maybe we can discuss this text during our session this evening. I am looking forward to it, and also to see the flower you have for me. haha, Thanks! : )