my answer to an ielts writing
Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personalityand development than any experience we may have in life .which do you think to be the major influence ?
It is well-known by public that one’s characteristics are determined by gene which are inherited from his parents as well as the environment that experienced in his life .but the issue everyone concerns is which factor plays a more important role .From my perspective ,the answer is the previous one .
As a nurse ,after taking care and observing a number of babies what i found is that every newborn baby shows different personality once they are born .Some of them turned to be quiet while others seem to be irritable and dynamic .Obviously ,all of these different characteristics are born with because the fluence of environment on them is minimal . With growing up ,such kinds of personality will continue throughout his life .
Another strong evidence can support my opinion is the sort of research that scientist did on the identical twins .It can be seen interestingly how similar they are in both their physical development and preferences ,even if they are took to complete distinct places and live there for a very long time .They always share same opinions on daily events and make same decision to similar question .We often hear that both of them get married with similar spouses.
Everybody has some disadvantages that they want to change ,someone want to be less shier and more outgoing ,someone want to be more positive ,someone want to be more confident and so on .
After trying a lot of methods they will find it is impossible to let them disappear totally.
Overall ,it is a good thing for everyone to believe such a truth that our personality is more shaped my genetic source ,because it is only in this way that people can start to accept the original self,to focus on his advantages ,to utilize his disadvantages well and to live a better life ,rather than wasting time on effort to change themself .
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my responce to an ielts text
Research indicates that the characteristics that we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experience we may have in life. What do you think is the most powerful influence on a person's personality and mental development?
It is well-known by the public that one’s characteristics are determined by genes which are inherited from his parents as well as the environment that he grew up in. However, the issue everyone is concerned with is which factor plays a more important role. From my perspective ,the answer is the previous one .
As a nurse ,after taking care and observing a number of babies, what I've found is that every newborn baby shows a different personality once they are born. Some of them are quiet while others seem to be irritable and dynamic. Obviously, all of these different characteristics are innate because the influence of the environment on them is minimal. These personality types do not change even after growing up.
Another strong piece of evidence that supports my opinion is the sort of research that scientists did on identical twins. It is interesting how similar they are in both their physical development and preferences, even if they are taken to completely different places and live apart for a very long time. They always share the same opinions on daily events and each answers similarly to similar questions .We also often hear that both of them get married to similar spouses.
Everybody has some disadvantages that they want to change, someone wants to be less shy and more outgoing, another wants to be more positive, yet another wants to be more confident and so on. After trying a lot of methods they will find it is impossible to have these personality traits totally disappear.
Overall, it is a good thing for everyone to believe that our personality is shaped more by his or her genetics, because it is only in this way that people can start accepting the original self, focusing on his advantages, utilizing his disadvantages well and to live a better life, rather than wasting time and effort to change themself .
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Thank you Thomas, so kind of you.
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Commas and periods are put right after a word and there is a space between the comma/period and the next word. Ex. The planes, birds, and bees fly in the sky.
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