2014-04-04

- You have to use the past tense "좋았어요" intstead of "좋아요"

- We use the word "휴가" when we go on a vacation, or. such as, when we apply for a leave.

For example,

go on a vacation = 휴가를 떠나다.

apply for a leave(vacation) = 휴가를 신청하다.

- "휴일" mean weekend or holilday. I guess you wanted to write ' Since it was a holiday, there was many people around here.'

- Also there was a number of kids, so you should use a plural noun as "아이들"

- You already mentioned that it was today, therefore, you do not need to repeat it oftenly.

- I would add green colored text to make it more smoothly.

오늘은 정말 날씨가 좋았어요.그래서. 동생들과 같이 교외로 소풍을 갔어요.오늘은 휴일이라 그런지 사람들이 많았어요. 그리고 아이들도 무척이나 많았어요. 우리는 연을 날렸어요./What are you trying to say here?/.하여튼 오늘 기분이 너무 좋았어요. (Also can use 좋아요)

2014-04-04

- You have to use the past tense "좋았어요" intstead of "좋아요"

- We use the word "휴가" when we go on a vacation, or. such as, when we apply for a leave.

For example,

go on a vacation = 휴가를 떠나다.

apply for a leave(vacation) = 휴가를 신청하다.

- "휴일" mean weekend or holilday. I guess you wanted to write ' Since it was a holiday, there was many people.'

- Also there was a number of kids, so you should use a plural noun as "아이들"

- You already mentioned that it was today, therefore, you do not need to repeat it oftenly.

오늘은 정말 날씨가 좋았어요.그래서. 동생들과 같이 교외로 소풍을 갔어요.오늘은 휴일이라 그런지 사람들이 많았어요.  우리는 연을 날렸어요./What are you trying to say here?/.아이들도 많았어요.하여튼 오늘 기분이 너무 좋았어요.