Just a short story about my everyday life

Recently I was going home on the bus  sat in the bus going home after a hard day of at working. I thought about the things I would will do once I got home if I am at home and what was showing is going on TV that night tonight. Suddenly, I heard a continual  strange peeping noise that made peeeep all the time. It was awful! I looked around and tried to figure out where these noises might be coming come from. I was pretty sure that it was coming comes from the watch of an old man who was sitting next to me. So I asked him. "Excuse me Sir, is this your watch that is making these peeeep noises all the time?" The guy faced me and said. "No it this is my pacemaker heard pacemake that is making these noises." After he told me that, I felt somewhat embarrassed somehow embarrassing for asking that question. But the noise was really annoying.

Thanks in advance for correction!!! :)

René

Just a short story about my everyday life

Recently I satwas sitting inon the bus going home after a hard day of working. I thoughtwas thinking about the things I willwould do ifwhen I am atgot home and what iswas going to be on TV tonight. Suddenly, I heard a strange noise that madewent peeeep all the time. It was awful! I looked around and tried to figure out where these noises might comebe coming from. I was pretty sure that it comeswas coming from the watch of an old man who was sitting next to me. So I asked him "Excuse me Sir, is thisit your watch that is making these peeeep noises all the time?" The guy faced me and said "No thisit is my heard pacemaker that is making these noises." After he told me that, I felt somewhathow embarrasseding for asking thatthe question. But the noise was really annoying.

Thanks in advance for correction!!! :)

René

Hi Rene! The story was really well written. When telling stories that happened in the past we usually use the past continuous: 

was + (main verb) + ing 

Don't forget quotation marks when you are using direct speech eg: he said, "I'm not coming tonight" 

Also, we only have pacemakers for the heart, nothing else so we don't need to say 'heart pacemaker' only 'pacemaker'.  Hope the corrections helped!