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Left Hand and Right Hand Everyone has one pair of hands just as in the world, there are man and woman.Left hand and right hand.They are the best friends. Once, I thought right hands take the hardest work,and it's skin become rough.Sometimes I didn't feel fair for them.In our whole life,right hands will be used not to counter.We used,no thanks.And right hands enjoy the same welfare with the left hands. Don't it feel grievance?Don't it hate be right hand? At a time,I found there are many scars in my left hand.Suddenly I was enlightened,Left hand just like woman ,they are delicate,and also hold the most deeply scars.

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Left Hand and Right Hand

Everyone has one a pair of hands, one left and one right. just as iIn the world society, there are man and woman the expectations of men and women mirror this right-hand/left hand duality. Left hand and right hand. They are the best of friends.
Once, I thought the right hands take endures the hardest work,. and iIt's skin becomes rough. Sometimes, I didn't feel like it was fair for them. In our whole life entire lives, right hands will be used not to counter [I don't understand this part].We used them but give no thanks. And right hands enjoy the same welfare with the left hands [I don't understand this part]. Don't Wouldn't it feel grievance aggrieved? Don't Wouldn't it hate to be the right hand?
At a time Then, I examined my left hand, and I found there are many scars there in my left hand. Suddenly, I was enlightened! The Lleft hand is just like a woman. ,tThey are delicate, but they and also hold the most deepestly scars.

 

Wow, you're writing is so abstract and poetic. It is very beautiful.

 

Grammatically, you could practice a few things. Remember to put a space after the period ending a sentence and the beginning of a new sentence. Also, be careful above comma overuse. Many times, it sounds better to end a line of thought and start a new sentence instead using a comma to add more and more ideas.

 

Also, a feminist critique of this paragraph: If society treated women and men equally, that would resolve many of the inequities you describe. Men would not be as rough and, therefore, have less reason to feel aggrieved. Women would not carry the deepest scars and, hopefully, would be seen as so delicate.

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