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could you help me chose the suitable adverbs or verbs in my paragraph. Hi, could you help me chose the suitable adverbs or verbs in my paragraph. Today is Valentine's day. I speedily got up after sending a delightful message to my girl friend. Outside, it was extremely cold. I hesitantly opened the door and shudderingly went down the staircase. Then, I determinately took my bike to school. All day, I was working industriously and delightedly.

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could you help me chose the suitable adverbs or verbs in my paragraph.

Hi, could you help me chose the suitable adverbs or verbs in my paragraph.

Today is Valentine's day.
I speedily got up after sending/having sent a delightful message to my girl friend, I rose hastily. Outside, it was extremely cold. I hesitantly opened the door and, shudderingly, went down the stairscase (go down stairs, not the staircase; is the staircase outside???). Then, I determinately (determinedly) resolutely rode took my bike to school. All day long I was working/worked industriously/conscientiously and enjoyably/pleasurably/enthusiastically delightedly.

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Today is Valentine's day.
I speedily quickly got up* after sending a delightful* message to my girlfriend. Outside, it was extremely cold so I hesitantly opened the door and shudderedingly as I went down the staircase*. Then, I determinately took rode my bike to school with determination. All day, I was working worked industriouslytirelessly and delightedly*.


*this works if you sent the message in bed via text?

*to me it does have a slightly feminine connotation (or one of "the snobbish elite"...I couldn't think of a better way to explain it :|) - other possible options: 'heartfelt', 'nice'. Even 'Valentine's day message' which would be very neutral.

*often we might just say 'stairs'

*I can't think of a sufficient word to describe this but I might say '...and with enjoyment' or 'All day, I enjoyed working tirelessly'...however neither of these answers quite satisfy me lol

 

Hope this helped :)

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Today is Valentine's day.
I speedily quickly got stood up after I sending sent (Past Tense) a delightful (Using this word sounds feminine. I can't think of an masculine adjective, right now.) [text message/email] (Depends on what you were using.) to my girlfriend.
Outside, it was extremely cold. hesitantly opened the door and shudderingly went down the staircase. It was extremely cold outside to the point were [I hesitantly opened the door./ I shivered before I opened the door.] and walked down stairs. (It makes no sense if left as two separate sentences.)
Then, I determinately took (There can be an adjective here, but I can't think of one.) rode my bike to school.
All day, I was working worked (PAST TENSE) industriously efficiently and delightedly. all day.

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Hello, can you guys help me correct this writting ?

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