I like when you're quiet
I like when you're quiet, because you're like absent.
And you hear me from afar, and my voice doesn't touch you.
It looks like your eyes have flown
and it looks like a kiss shut your mouth
How all the things are fill of my soul
you emerge of the things, fill of the mine soul .
butterfly of dream, you look like my soul
and you look like the word 'melancholy''
I like when you're quit, and you're like distant
and you're like complaining, butterfly in coo
and you listen me from afar, and my voice doesn't arrive at you
let me that i shut up with the your silence.
Let me that i talk to you with your silence, too
clear like a lamp, simple like a ring
you are like the night , so far and easy
I like when you're quiet, because you're like absent.
Distant and painful, like if you're died.
then, a word , a smile is enough.
And i'm happy, happy of it's not true.
This is my favorite poem of Pablo Neruda, and i try to translate to english...
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Thank you very much, marcus!!
If you need something, i'm here for you.
;)
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"Estás como ausente" would maybe be better translated as "as though you were absent" or "as if you were absent" because "you're like absent" does not sound entirely correct.
"arrullo" can be "cooing" or "lullaby" in English. "cooing" is the noun, but "coo" is the verb form.
When you translate "Dejame que" you do not need to translate the "que." It is correct English to write "Let me talk." "Let that me talk" is incorrect.
The rest is good, though. If you would like to help each other in Spanish and English, that'd be great.
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Thank you very muuuch!! :)
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I can't read in original, but I've looked through Russian version.
maybe smth like this:
I like your silence. It reminds me absent.
My voice will not disturb your rest,
My look will ot disturb your modesty
As if my kiss has made you closed.
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