Snowing
It have snowing about 24 hours.I was so excited when I saw the world coverd with snow,so i got up in the fastest speed since I'v been home.
I really want to make a sonwman when the winter came, now my little dream would come true,so I prepared the buttons,carrot,ect.After I finished my “artwork”,wow,It was so cute,but my niece asked me "What's this?aunt" with a confused face........
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Snowing
It was have snowing for about 24 hours. I was so excited when I saw the world covered with snow, so i got up at in the fastest speed since I've been home.
I really wanted to make a snowman when the winter came, and now my little dream would come true, so I prepared the buttons, carrot, ect. After I finished my “artwork”, wow, it was so cute, but my niece asked me "What's this ? aunt?" with a confused face........
Just as a little note: after using punctuation like a full stop, comma or a question mark, leave a space before the next word. I've done this for you in my correction as well.
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Snowing
It have been snowing for about 24 hours. I was so excited when I saw the world covered with snow, so i got up at the fastest speed since I'v been at home.
I really want to make a snowman when the winter came, and now my small dream would come true. So I prepared the buttons,carrot,et al. After I finished my “artwork”,wow,It was so cute. But my niece asked me with a confused face:"What's this? aunt...
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Snowing
It had been snowing about 24 hours.I was so excited when I saw the world covered with snow,so i got up in the fastest speed since I had been at home.
I really wanted to make a snowman when the winter comes, My little dream would have come true,so I prepared the buttons,carrot,ect.After I finished my “artwork”,wow,It was so cute,but my niece asked me "What's this?aunt" with a confused face........
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Snowing
It was snowing about 24 hours. I was so excited when I saw the ground was coverd with snow. I got up in the fastest speed since I'v been at home.
I really want to make a sonwman when the winter was coming, now my little dream would come true. I prepared the buttons, carrot, ect. After I finished my “artwork”, wow, it was so cute! But my niece asked me with a confused face: What's this, aunt?
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Snowing
It was snowing for about 24 hours.I was so excited when I saw the covered world with snow,then I got up in the fastest way.
I really want to make a snowman when the winter come,If my little dream come true, I would prepare the buttons,carrot,ect.After I finished my “artwork”,I said ''wow, It is so cute''.But my niece asked me "What's this?aunt" with a confused face......
there happened a confusion in second paragraph.I could correct like this.I hope it's what you mean
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