A beautiful narrative, Monica. I re-phrased your work to demonstrate how writing in the third-person enables the reader to objectively consider the emotions you are expressing. We shifted your writing to the second-person where you thank the recipient, which personalizes you work, then we move to the first-person at the final sentence, where you express your personal sentiment. 
Please keep writing. You have excellent skill.
Thank you,
Dan 

Part of My Life

It's It is hard to say goodbye to your friends with that you were laughing and spending some fun time, with whom one had shared laughs and fun times. but now I can We realize that they were angels amoungst us, who taught understand that you were and angel that lived with us to teach us how beautiful is live life is. It is never too late to tell them they will always be in our hearts.  and now I can tell you that you always would be on my heart. Thanks for everithung.. Thank you for everything. I just wanted to express tell you this now, this because there are moments when we do not see sometimes We can not see how wonderful is to be alive, and I'm I am so happy for all of the things that I have.

Part of my lifee 

It is hard to say goodbye tor friends with whom one had shared laughs and fun times. We realize that they were angels amoungst us, who taught us how beautiful life is. It is never too late to tell them they will always be in our hearts. Thank you for everything. I tell you this now because there are moments whe we do not see how wonderful is to be alive, an I am so happy for all of the things that I have . :)