The second day

Good morning, everybody! It's my second day to write a composition on italk.Yesterday I wrote a composition named "today" and refered a question. There are some mistakes in my composition. I am appeaciate that Jim and Jacob corrected my composition. I benefit a lot from their correction. Today, in chongqing, it's a dull weather. Sometimes the weather can have some impact on people's mood. Consequently my mood is gloomy as the weather. However I will adjust state of my mind in some positive ways. In the case, listening to music, shopping on taobao, eating yunmmy food, chatting with friends even making up to make me feel better.
Thus ,dear friends, if you are confused by the bad weather, you can take my advice. Have a nice day! And have a sweet dream for those are going to bed for the reason of time diffirence.

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the second day

Good morning,everybody! it's my second day time to write a composition on italk.yesterday,i wrote a composition named "today" and refered a question.there are were some mistakes in my composition.i am appeaciate appreciated that jim and jacob correct corrected my composition.i benefit benefited a lot from their corrections.
today, in chongqing ,it's a dull weather .sometime Sometimes ,the weather can may have some negative impact on people's mood .consequently,my mood is as gloomy as the weather.however ,i will adjust state of my mind my mood in some positive ways, .in the case such as ,listening to music ,shopping on taobao ,eating yunmmy food ,chatting with friends even making up to make me feel better .
Thus ,dear friends ,if you are confused by uncomfortable with the bad weather,you can please take my advice .Have a nice day! and have a sweet dream for those who are going to bed for the reason of time diffirence.

I strongly agree with your opinion that weather impacts people unconsciously. The weather makes people react in a certain way, either people get excited or people get anxious. The fact is, here in my city, it's been a really nice day today. We haven't had that much sun recently, and it's really sunny outside. Therefore we decided to go outside and walk around a bit at noon. Keep it up, my friend. Keep writing!

The Second Day

Good morning,everybody! It's my second day to write a composition on italk. Yesterday, I wrote a composition named "Today" and referred a question. There were (are) some mistakes in my composition and I appreciate (.i am appeaciate that) Jim and Jacob correct my composition. I benefitted (i benefit) a lot from their corrections.
Today, in Chongqing , it's a dull day.  (weather .) Sometimes ,the weather can have some impact on people's mood, (.) consequently,my mood is as gloomy as the weather. However , I will adjust my state of (my) mind in some positive ways . Thus, I will indulge in (in the case ,) listening to music ,shopping on taobao ,eating yummy (yunmmy) food ,chatting with friends and even doing my make-up, (making up) all to make me feel better .
Thus ,dear friends ,if you are feeling downhearted (confused) because of (by) the bad weather,you can take my advice .Have a nice day! Also, (and have a sweet dream) to (for) those for whom it is bedtime, (are going to bed for the reason of time diffirence.) have a sweet dream.