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Essay every day - [3] / [100] What can we do to help people around the world have clean water to drink? Water is the thing we can't avoid, because it's extremely important for us, the second most important after oxygen. Having said that water nowadays is not everywhere very clean, because of careless people. It seems to be complicated to solve this problem, mind you I'm inclined to believe that, there are some possible ways to make our water cleaner. First of all, we obviously should stop polluting lakes and rivers. People really do not avoid throwing rubbish into rivers, or other water areas. This pollution gradually affects rivers, lakes, and if pollution is not stopped and there is water is not cleaned, that consequences reach us as well. Water we drink becomes polluted, with a lot of unhealthy to people impurities. Second, we should start protesting against huge, well known factories, which are using water for cooling system. The used water slightly becomes polluted, even though most of factories have cleaning systems, and it's sent back to the rivers. Of course, it's impossible to shut down all these factories, but protests and other actions may force at least some factories to be shut down, or at least to buy new cleaning systems. Finally, ships is another reason of polluted water. There are a variety of accidents, when millions tone of chemicals appear in the water. Engineers always try to make sure that ship will reach the destination safely, having said that it doesn't happen all the time, it's obvious that they should take more attention to this, because such an accident gives serious consequences. Taking everything into account, It's obvious that we could fight for the clean water .We must force polluters to understand, what may be the consequences of that, they are doing .It's easy, we just need to try. I feel that it's one of the weakest essays I''ve written.However, maybe i'm wrong.

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Essay every day - [3] / [100]

What can we do to help people around the world have clean water to drink?

Water is the something we can't avoid, because it's extremely important for us, the second most important thing after oxygen. Having said that water nowadays is not everywhere very clean everywhere, because of careless people. It seems to be complicated to solve this problem, mind you, I'm inclined to believe that, there are some possible ways to make our water cleaner.

First of all, we obviously should stop polluting lakes and rivers. People really do not avoid throwing rubbish into rivers, or other water areas. bodies of water. This pollution gradually affects rivers, lakes, and if pollution is not stopped and there is the water there is not cleaned, that those consequences will reach us as well. Water The water we drink becomes polluted, with a lot of unhealthy to people impurities.

Second, we should start protesting against huge, well known factories, which are using water for cooling systems. The used water becomes slightly becomes polluted, even though most of the factories have cleaning systems, and it's sent back to the rivers. Of course, it's impossible to shut down all these factories, but protests and other actions may force at least some factories to be shut down, or at least to buy new cleaning systems.

Finally, ships is are another reason of for polluted water. There are a variety of accidents, when millions of tone tons of chemicals appear in the water. Engineers always try to make sure that each ship will reach the its destination safely, having said that it doesn't happen all the time. it's It's obvious that they should take pay more attention to this, because such an accident gives has serious consequences.

Taking everything into account, It's obvious that we could fight for the clean water. We must force polluters to understand, what may be the consequences of that, they are doing may be. It's easy, we just need to try.


I feel that it's one of the weakest essays I''ve I've written. However, maybe i'm I'm wrong.

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