Question: Is the best way to improve the quality of education to increase a teacher’s salary?

Education is fundamental to a country’s future improvement. The government has published many policies to raise the quality of education in schools. Some people point out that increasing the teacher’s income is the best way to improve to the quality of education. I totally agree with it.

First, a higher paying job could attract a number of knowledgeable and excellent talents from all walks of life to become a teacher. This will enrich the teaching resource of the country. The student can acquire a rich fund of academic knowledge and professional technology in the school. They do not need to spend extra expenses on cram school educational institutions to learn other majors. For example my university invited a highly paid, standout educationist from Royal Collage of Art to show us his opus.  He came up with new concepts to for us. The words what that he said on in the lecture opened our view.

Second, the teachers with higher pay do not need to find a part-time job to subsidize their family incomes. As a result of this decreased economic pressure the teacher can put their heart and soul into their own work in school. And The teacher’s passion can be motivated in by some extent by granting them more salary. They would be more willing to devote themselves to the career of education, and train more students for the profession. The quality of eduction can be guaranteed. According to the latest survey conducted by the Ministry of Eduction of China, 30% of key schools try to increase the salary of teachers which increases the teacher’s positivity a lot. More and more teachers insist(?) at their job and are willing to work in formal school for a longer time.

Admittedly, increasing the income of teachers will lead to more costs for parents and students. The cost for hiring the best know professor will be reflected in tuition fees, which will deprive the educational opportunity of many underprivileged students. But if the government really wants to improve the quality of eduction, it should appropriate the educational fund to the key school, reducing the pressure of the school. Underprivileged students can apply for national tuitional assistance to help them finish their school work.

In conclusion, increasing the salary of teachers have many benefits on improving the quality of education, aspects of strengthening teachers and the enthusiasm of teachers. Although some negative aspects on this,but the problem can

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