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the first day good moring!everybody.now ,it's 6:23 o'clock am .it's winter ,so at this time the sky is dark.and it's my earliest day to get up in winter vacation.i am gona to tell you 2 things.the first thing is i decide to write at least one composition in italk to improve my english.the second thing is about my dream.in the dream i dreamt a boy who i liked in my primary school he is handsome ,but when we graduate from primary school,we merely out of touch.he leave a deep impression on me .during a long time ,i missed him .recently,i always dreamed about him .in my dream ,he still looks like image in the primary school it seems like he never changed.but ,once a time ,i looked the photo which made in primary classmate party,he changed hugely,he is no longer handsome. he is fat which frustrates me .but,i can't help dreaming him ,in the dream i like him .but when i wake up.i can't describle my feelings.yeserday,i was dreamt him once again.i don't konw why .thus ,i want to share with all of you ,i want have sombody to listen to me about this thing .

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I'll try not to alter too much of the sense of your paragraph. Here are my corrections in bold with a few notes.

 

Good morning, everybody! make sure to separate your greeting with a comma (,) followed by who you are addressing. In this case, "everybody".

 

Now, it's 6:23 AM. There's no need to use o'clock in this case. In normal conversation, one would only say "o'clock" if it was 6:00 (Six o'clock). If it was 6:23, you would say "It is six twenty-three."

 

I am going to tell you two things. Going is typed "gonna" if you choose to use slang.

 

The first thing is that I decided to write at least one composition in italk to improve my english. The second thing is about my dream. In the dream, I dreamt about boy who I liked in my primary school - He is handsome. Unfortunately, when we graduated from primary school, we fell out of touch. He left a deep impression on me. For a long time, I missed him. Recently, I keep dreaming about him. In my dream, he still looks like he did in primary school. It seems like he never changed. Though, one time, I looked at the photo taken for the primary classmate party and I noticed that he changed dramatically. He is no longer handsome. He is fat which frustrates me. However, I can't help dreaming of him. In the dream I like him, but when I wake up I can't describe my feelings. Yesterday, I dreamt of him once again. I don't know why. I want to share this story with all of you. I want somebody to listen.



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