A letter to a previous boss Hello! I wrote this to prepare my writing exam. I really THANK YOU your corrections or comments. ( I had to write at least 250 words). Dear. Mr. Douglas Last year I w

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A letter to a previous boss Hello! I wrote this to prepare my writing exam. I really THANK YOU your corrections or comments. ( I had to write at least 250 words). Dear. Mr. Douglas Last year I worked for your prestigious school as an Elementary-teacher, I taught Science, arts and Social Studies. I leaded the Science fair for two years, it increased the scientific spirit among the students. I designed the arts activities to Pre-school from Elementary courses, children enjoyed them a lot, used ecological materials in a creative way and brushed some techniques over, we made a gallery wall where parents could see their children’s artwork. I worked on “Love your Country” project with excellent results. Whole school community learnt more about its hometown and its country, instilling nationalism values. We celebrated the Colombian’s month successfully. I am pleased to commend you I finally got my professional degree in English at UNAD last December; I applied to a bilingual institute as a language tutor for teenagers, I thank if you would want to give information about my abilities and character according to get this new labor opportunity. Sincerelly, Amalia R.

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A letter to a previous boss

Hello! I wrote this to prepare my writing exam. I really THANK YOU your corrections or comments. ( I had to write at least 250 words).

Dear Mr Douglas,

Last year I worked for your prestigious school as an elementary teacher, where I taught Science, Arts and Social Studies. I led the Science fair for two years which increased the scientific spirit among the students.
I designed the arts activities from pre-school to elementary level and children enjoyed them a lot. We used ecological materials in a creative way using brushing techniques. With these we made a gallery wall where parents could see their children’s artwork.
I worked on a “Love your Country” project with excellent results. The whole school community learnt more about its hometown and its country, instilling values of nationalism. We celebrated the Colombian’s month successfully. (not sure what the colombian's month means)
Finally I am pleased to inform you that I got my professional degree in English at UNAD last December. I have applied to a bilingual institute as a language tutor for teenagers. If you are agreeable would you please give information about my abilities and character to help me get this new job opportunity.

Yours Sincerely,
Amalia R.

Hello dear sister. My corrections are as follow: Line 2: You write a mixture of capital letters and small letter in the composition. All subjects are in capital letters, Science, Arts, Social Studies Line 2: verb tense is not correct in leaded. It is “led” Line 5: Missing pronoun: “I used ecological…” Line 10: Verb misuse. I think the verb you want to use is not “commend”. The appropriate verb is “comment” Line 11: Change “I thank” for “I’d be glad” Line 12: Change “abilities” for “professional skills” or “academic skills” or something with the word “skills” Line 12: Change “according” for “in order to” Line 13: Change “labor” for “job”. Labor is more used as a verb and job in this case is a noun. EXCELLENT COMPOSITION. EASY TO READ AND VERY CONCISE!!! CONGRATS.

I had to write at least 150 words!!

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