As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name.
For my Englis homework I have to write a text which starts in this way ''As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name."
As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name. I turned around between the crowd to find out the person who was calling out my name. Then I saw him. He was my father who was looking for me!
A week ago, my friend Bill bought two tickets for a rock concert and invited me to go there with him. I asked the permission at my parents. They forbidden me to go, but I really wanted to go. So that evening I escaped from the window of my room secretly and I went at the concert with Bill. I think my father understood it and came to the concert to catch me and take me home. I just didn't want to him find out that I had disobeyed, so I run away and came back home. When he got home too, he asked me where I had gone and I just said that I had taken the dog for a walk! Well, this time I got away with it, buy the next time I won't risk so much again!
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As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name.
For my Englis homework I have to write a text which starts in this way ''As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name."
As the concert finished, I heard someone call my name. I turned around between in the crowd to find out the person who was calling out my name. Then I saw him. He It was my father who was looking for me!
A week ago, my friend Bill bought two tickets for a rock concert and invited me to go there with him. I asked the permission at from my parents. They forbidden forbid me to go, but I really wanted to go. So that evening I secretly escaped from the window of my room secretly and I went at to the concert with Bill. I think my father understood figured it out and came to the concert to catch get me and take me home. I just didn't want to him find out that I had disobeyed, so I run ran away and came went back home. When he got home too, he asked me where I had gone and I just said that I had taken the dog for a walk! Well, this time I got away with it, buy but the next time I won't risk so much again!
Great job~^^
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Good.
Julia's correction is also good, I'd point out that: "figured it out" is American. You could say "realised" instead.
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