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Wish your effort to find the truth of Fukushima (1/2) I happened to watch the YouTube video called “Abita”—an award-winning animation that triggered huge sensation over the world and directed by a Japanese collegiate girl who is pursuing her field of study in Germany. This few-minutes animation depicts the aftermath of the remaining tragedy in Fukushima that has been exposed to nuclear pollution since 2011, convincing that the area turned into nowhere to play with freedom for children in a dramatic way. Her genuine talent really enabled to express the calamity inciting pure sympathy of viewers towards the residences of the place, along with the overall fantastic footage and unique touch of art. Regardless of my homage to her great work, I must give a heads-up to all people; DO NOT take it as serious as the way it’s seen. Art is significantly influential. It purely infuses a great impact of message into human’s minds by audiovisual means. It shares a framework of idea of artists and would become true if the majority accepted. Assume that an art is designed in accordance with the artist’s lifetime experience or inspiration by on-the-spot investigation, it would deserve to be applauded without questions. However, in this case she—the director of the short animation—had learnt the fact indirectly. All information she had gleaned was nearly equal to just a rumor. Remember that she lives in Germany, though she is a Japanese. Plus, I am sure that she is from neither Fukushima nor its vicinity. There was no such a way left her to examine the real life of children in Fukushima except through broadcast or the Internet, both of which are yet filtered resources; namely, they are ideally manipulated by third parties. Ironically, since grabbing more attention comes first for them, they rather exaggerate the truth than convey as it is by a series of ridiculous edition. That’s why we must remain in mind that information by mass media could be distorted by their commercial convenience all times. Therefore, she is nothing but one of us who are danced on a tide of unascertainable information.

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I wish you all will make an effort to find the truth about Fukushima (1/2)

I just watched the YouTube video called “Abita”—an award-winning animation that created a huge sensation over the world. It was directed by a Japanese college student girl who is pursuing her studies in Germany. This short animation depicts the aftermath of the remaining tragedy in Fukushima that was exposed to nuclear pollution since 2011. In a dramatic fashion, the animation convinced us that the area turned into a place where children have no freedom to play. Her genuine talent really enabled us to express the calamity, inciting viewers to become sympathetic towards Fukushima. Overall, the footage was beautiful and uniquely artistic as well. Regardless of my review of her great work, I want to give a heads-up to everyone: DO NOT take it as seriously as the way it’s shown.

すみません。しょさんの ふたつパラグラフが わかりません。

I'm sorry, Sho san, I don't easily understand your second paragraph.

Some advice I can give you with your blog entry is to write a little more simply. The longer the sentence is, the less impactful your thought is. For instance, connecting lots of thoughts together in one sentence may be better as two sentences. I understood your first paragraph, but in a lot of your sentences, I tried to shorten them and use more simple terms.

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