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Which is Better,Teaching Children at Home or at School?

Some people believe teaching children at home is best for a child’s development. I agree with it this. at some point.*

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In my country, there are usually more than 40 students in each class with only one teacher. So, not every student has enough time and opportunities to react with teachers. Meanwhile, teachers are unable to care for all the students as well as follow up with their individual studying problems. On the contrary, if children can be taught at home by their parents or a tutor, then they will probably get more attention than at school. And that would be very helpful to find out their individual difficulties on learning learning difficulties so as to personalize the content of a lessons and the way you teach them (the manner of teaching).

However, on the other hand(choose one, However,/On the other hand,), I think it is also important to take them to school. Schools can provide a reactive an interactive environment that families cannot do. At school, children will get a good chance to meet others at the same or similar age as themselves. They can talk and study together and also learn from each other. Apart from knowledge in and of itself, how to behave in a group and how to work with others to make things done is another important skill needed get things done are other important skills to be learned.

On a the whole, both of the two methods have their own advantages and disadvantages. It is not wise no matter which you are sticking with**. In my opinion, a combination of the two ways is key to helping children grow healthier and better.

*This is your thesis statement.  Your essay is exploring the issue pros and cons of both sides, so you need a thesis that shows this OR you need a thesis that takes one side in the debate.  EX: There are pros and cons to both positions.

** What do you mean?  You seem to say neither way is wise, but I think you mean it is not wise to use only one way.  Better would be, "It is not wise to stick to just one method of teaching."