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Education is very important for developing a future personality, and becoming a professional, and a leader. Teachers usually assign homework for students so that they have to get build their knowledge at home besides as well as school. While there are advantages to both having homework and not having any, I believe that doing homework is more beneficial.

First of all, I think that it is important for young people to do their homework in order to learn how to find important information. Nowadays, in the global age of information technology, it is quite difficult to understand weather whether it is you've found the information you need or not, and weather whether you should use it or not. For instance, when I was preparing for my biology class, I had to find out about the researches of lung cancer in the twentieth century. I gave out submitted my work and got a good result, while my peers’ grades were not satisfying due to their inability to find an appropriate information.

In addition, from my experience, children become more responsible, when they do homework. For instance, when a sister of mine my sister went to university, she understood that a large part of her life depends on herself. She had to study hard to get good grades. Nobody in my family could help her, because finances were an unfamiliar topic to all of us. My sister understood that it was her responsibility to get her diploma and find a job to support herself and her future family.

Finally, I believe that students can find their way out learn from difficult situations. This is due to my belief that homework can sometimes seem challenging. One has to research a lot of books, surf the Internet, and consult parents or friends. For example, when I was preparing my art project, where I had to tell talk about me my favorite artist (Salvador Dali), there was only a small amount of information online about him in Ukrainian, so I had to read and work a lot to make my project.

To sum it up, doing homework is an important part of the educational process. Children can get develop a lot new knowledge at home. Besides Moreover, they develop their skills of finding information, becoming more responsible, and finding ways out of difficult situations.

[Very good indeed! Great structure, good thesis. We don't "get knowledge", we "develop" or "grow" our knowledge. When you're writing a list of a few things separated by commas, remember to use "and" before the last item in the list to make your sentence complete. Keep it up!]