MY FAVOURITE THINS AND INTEREST

I am 25 years. I only speak only to two languages: Arabic and English. I can't speak english very will well because my vocabulary just isn't enough to understand everything that someone says to me and i don't always get the main point.My interests are listening to music , reading ,writing ,going out with my family ,travelling and cooking .I also like my laptop . it's isn't new but l really like it .it's blue colour and it's got everything i want: e-mail ,the internet,a DVD player and I have got some really good ames games on it .

MY FAVOURITE THINGS AND INTERESTS

I am 25 years old and (. I only) speak just two (to) languages Arabic and English. I can't speak English very well (will) because my vocabulary just isn't enough to understand everything that someone says to me and I don't always get the main point. My interests are listening to music , reading ,writing ,going out with my family ,travelling and cooking .I also have a (like my) laptop and, although it (it's) isn't new, (but) l really like it . It's a blue colour and has (it's got) everything I need (i want) such as e-mail ,the internet,a DVD player and (I have got) some really good games. ( on it .)

Your writing is fine, Fiona. You have some long and complex sentences and have written them well.The main thing to remember is to put the comma immediately after the word and leave one space - eg ......music, reading, writing, ...... Also the same for full stops......eg.... I really like it. It's a blue......