An IELTS composition, help me to correct it , many thanks!!

Many countries spend a lot of money on art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent public services and facilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.





There is a great argument about whether government should invest in the arts, especially when the state is suffering from the budget problems. Those who object to public funds for the arts believe that money should be used on public facilities. I am of the opinion that government should take citizen’s benefits into consideration and adjust the spending on art or infrastructures.

It is important to realize that art is the culture legacy. It means that art is the best way to expresses the kernel of culture and different cultures have various art forms, so government spending money on art is an efficient way to protect the multiculturalism. For example, the government of Beijing holds various kinds of theme exhibitions in park every year to spread colorful cultures.

However, public facilities should be receive more investment than art, the others believe. Building a library for readers or mending a road is more important than putting up some sculpture. They think that holding an international concert by government is an extravagant behavior.

I personally think that spiritual needs are as important as material needs when people no longer suffer from hunger and cold. Arts are realize our spiritual needs, even our belief. If a person is without faith, he might as well be a zombie. Only with the arts enriching our lives can we feel advantages of material life.

To conclude, what the government should do is how to keep a balance between investing in art and public facilities. However, in some countries that lag behind, I still think people should solve the problem of food and clothing first.

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