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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be taken as good as those by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?



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The advantage of Internet has already changed people’s working methods and lifestyle. A growing number of peoples are taking distance-learning into consideration who want to enrich themselves at home. Distance-learning is different from traditional education, studying online has many advantages which traditional college cannot go beyond.

In contrast with conventional education, distance learning is much more flexible, therefore making it possible for people to shorten the education gap. Distance education is suitable for those who has already in the workforce or being busy for their family such as the new born baby having a family. The other group of students are those who are struggle in some middle-scale cities in China. For instance, there was a huge number of students complain that they cannot get the equal chance to study small languages in some developing cities before Internet was used for online education.

But However, the main disadvantage of studying online is that there are less interactions between teachers and students. Teacher spreads the knowledge by cloud technology, leading to a sense of distance. And The other's problem we cannot ignore is the data transfer technology. Apparently, more complex techniques, break down more easily as we know. We cannot do anything unless we are software engineers. Moreover, students are also required to plan their time by themselves, so they should be well-motivated and self-disciplined. Therefore, distance education is not appropriate for those students who cannot study without teacher’s supervision.

In conclusion, we should recognize the advantages of distance learning and do not without ignoring the negative impact of it. I still believe that conventional education is not the unique method to study, but it will not be effortless replaced.

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