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How can university prepare people for their future careers? (2) In addition, students could advance interpersonal communication techniques considerably and ability of dealing with affairs in university. We would meet and communicate with many different people in university, such as our professors, classmates, roommates and even foreigners. Through all the communication, we are able to obtain the key point of being appropriate and using the certain words and behaviors in talking with different people, for example, when we talk with foreigners, we should bear in mind acceptance of cutural difference and respect it. In addition, many of us would join diverse students’ organizations, hoping to develop creativity, problem solving, decision-making, and management ability. Each event is undertaken by one or two PM (project manager), who would arrange and be responsible for the whole process of the activity. To be a project manager, we should first plan what his or her activity aims, when and where it take places, how much many will be spent as well as how many people are needed. At same time, we need to balance our study and work, which is a common problem we would confront in our future career. In conclusion, studying in college and engaging in corporations could benefit our communication skills and ability of handling affairs. University is designed to be a transitional stage for people from school to society, which lays foundation for a lifelong career. Not only could we discover our professional path in university, but also improve fundamental professional knowledge during interactive class sessions. In addition, we could also master techniques of interpersonal communication when we come face-to-face with different people and skills of dealing with affairs. University’s four preparations would offer students a broad and solid road to the economy of the 21st century.

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Thank you for your help!:) To be honest, I found some of my examples are not closely connected to the topic sentences and need to change.
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How can universities prepare people for their future careers? (2)

In addition, students could advance improve their interpersonal communication techniques considerably and as well as their ability of dealing to deal with affairs in of the university. We would meet and communicate with many different people in the university, such as our professors, classmates, roommates and even foreigners. Through all the communication, we are able learn how to be to obtain the key point of being appropriate and to use using the certain appropriate words and behaviors in when talking with different people, for example, when we talk with foreigners, we should bear in mind acceptance of cutural differences and respect them it.

In addition, many of us would could join diverse students’ organizations, hoping to develop creativity, problem solving, decision-making, and management ability.

Each event is undertaken by one or two PM (project manager), who would arrange and be responsible for the entire whole process of the activity. To be a project manager, we should first plan what his or her activity aims, when and where it take places, how much many will be spent as well as how many people are needed. At same time, we need to balance our study and work, which is a common problem we would confront in our future career. In conclusion, studying in college and engaging in corporations could benefit our communication skills and ability of handling affairs. 


University is designed to be a transitional stage for people from school to society, which lays foundation for a lifelong career. Not only could we discover our professional path in university, but also improve fundamental professional knowledge during interactive class sessions. In addition, we could also master techniques of interpersonal communication when we come face-to-face with different people and skills of dealing with affairs. University’s four preparations would offer students a broad and solid road to the economy of the 21st century.

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I corrected about half of your entry. You have lots of vocabulary that is good, but the grammar needs work. These kinds of abstract topics are difficult for even native speakers to write about, so do not worry too much that there are many corrections and that your writing here is difficult to understand. Try writing about things that are more concrete, less abstract, and then work your way to more abstract topics. That is my advice.

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