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English-Pls help to correct Qianlong Manhaining is developed by Shenzhen Qianlong Property Group Co., Ltd. The project is located in the high-end living area - Shenzhen New Longhua Town, with total areasup to 50000.55㎡, total construction area approx. 4.6㎡. The whole community is composed of 14 block 26-to-28-story high-end buildings, among which only one building is a 28-story-tall high-end hotel apartment. Qianlong Manhaining provides high-end residence, hotel apartment, leisure facilities and commercial facilities is an integrated high-end project for residence and commerce.

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Qianlong Manhaining is developed by Shenzhen Qianlong Property Group Co., Ltd. The project is located in the high-end living area - Shenzhen New Longhua Town, with total areasup to 50000.55㎡, total construction area approx. 4.6㎡. The whole community is comprised (composed) of 14 tower blocks of  26-to-28 storey exclusive (-story high-end) buildings, of (among) which just (only) one building is a 28-storey luxury (story-tall high-end) hotel. (apartment.) Qianlong Manhaining provides elite (high-end) residential, (residence,) hotel (apartment), leisure (facilities) and commercial facilities within (is) an integrated high-end project for residential and commercial use. (residence and commerce.)

 

Well written, YoYo. The only real criticism to be levelled is in the use of the term 'high-end' - fine as it stands but you used it five times, so better if you can vary the wording by using synonyms. I have suggested a couple but you could words such as 'elite', 'luxurious', 'high-class', 'exclusive',  'select', 'elegant', 'fashionable' etc...

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