the worst place I visited
Today, I want to talk about a terrorific experience. I hope you don't frightened with my story. Go on!
Last summer, I made a trip to the worst place somebody could to visit: Disneyland. I will never recommend this place. Normally, people believe this place is perfecto for their holidays, but by far it's the most boring place than I were in my life.
Firstly, I was hearing everytime the same song, the same song, the same song. There wasn't a silence moment! it was incredible! When the day finished, I could heard this song into my mind. I thought maybe I was turning mad. This bloody song wake me up yet in the black nigths! it's a nightmare!
On the other hand, I could see fake smile around me. Micky was smiling while he was working for eight hours. Pluto was smiling while children were taking several photos with him. I can't bear this fake situation.
I understand people with children like this place, but I think I will not go back again. Do somebody feel these same feelings?
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 3
1
Today, I want to talk about a terrorific terrifying experience. I hope you don't aren't frightened with by my story. Go on!
Last summer, I made a trip to the worst place somebody anybody could to ever visit: Disneyland. I will never recommend this place. Normally, people believe this place is perfecto perfect for their holidays, but by far it's the most boring place than that I were have ever been in my life.
Firstly, I was constantly hearing everytime the same song, the same song, the same song. There wasn't a silence silent moment! it It was incredible*! Even when the day finished was over, I could heard still hear this song into in my mind. I thought maybe I was turning going mad. This bloody song wakes me up still in the black of night. yet in the black nigths! It's a nightmare!
On the other hand** While I was there, I could see fake smiles around me. Micky was smiling while he was working for eight hours. Pluto was smiling while children were taking several photos with him. I can't couldn't bear this fake situation.
I understand people with children like this place, but I think I will not don't think I'll go back again. Do somebody feel these same feelings? Does anyone else feel the same way?
* "Incredible" is technically correct, but to add a more negative feeling, you might try "unbelievable" or "ridiculous."
**Use "on the other hand" when you're contrasting ideas. Since you're still talking about how much you hated Disneyland, that transition doesn't work here. I supplied you with one that does work, but there are plenty of other options as well.
Overall, this is really well written. I wish I could write half so well in Spanish! :)
0
Miguel:
It is true that many people regard Disneyland as some sort of ultimate trek or journey to which they most take their family as though they were Going----To---See---God or something.
I have always regarded that sort of journey absurd. I haven't been to Disneyland, and Amusement Parks hold little interest for me. I won't deny that some rides are a thrill.
I've had thrills enough. Reality is far more interesting.
Disneyland must be a nice place to go if one is bored I suppose, and I think that it can be fun.
Honestly though, I think a good movie, a good book, or a visit with a real person to be far more exciting.
Indeed, One hour of interesting dialogue on Skype far exceeds the thrills of an amusement park. So if Disneyland was for you an unpleasant affair, you might be warmed by the fact that some others find little of interest in it.
.
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
