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Businessman do everything to make profit

In our world business plays an important role in the development of our economics and our lives. However, nowadays businessmen are doing everything to make profit for themselves. Let me lay down my reasons Let me present my reasoning. It has a powerful and tangible influence on us.

On the one hand, they are working hard for creating and developing of to create and develop new goods to improve our lives. Although scientists are ‘brain factories’ of new inventions, businessmen provide them with expenses – the ‘brain fuel’. While going to the local supermarket, drugstore, or travel agency, we realise how important the business is. There is a strong doubt It is unlikely that life would be the same without entrepreneurs.

On the other hand, most of businessmen are trying to suit the market and get make profit, what which sometimes adversely affects our health and entire life. For example, they prefer to add artificial components instead of natural ones, hence humanity obtains creates more and more diseases each year. The same holds are true for manufacturing. It is known that some producers cut for out quality material (you could replace the part: "out quality material" with "corners", although this might just be an American expression), using inappropriate ones. Their moto is ‘Success is a concept measured in terms of money and time’. There is nothing claimed No claims are made about people.

By looking at t The above mentioned reasons, I conclude lead me to the conclusion that businessman do everything to make profit.

I'm sure I've missed a few, certainly where it comes to making it sound more "English". For one thing, there are so many correct ways of saying the same thing. Also, I wanted it to be your writing, so I skipped a few that weren't as wrong as what I did correct (in my opinion, others may disagree).

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                                       Businessmen do everything to make a profit


     In our world, business plays an important role in the development of our economics and in our lives. However, nowadays businessmen are doing everything in their power to make a profit for themselves.  Through the creation of inventions, and the cheap production that negatively affect the quality of the product; this helps create profit for businessmen.  
 

     Businessmen are working hard to create and develop new goods to "improve our lives." Although, there are some inventors that are the "brain factories" of these new inventions, and these businessmen provide them with expenses for the "brain fuel" to create such inventions. While us, the consumers, go to the local supermarkets, drugstores, or travel agencies, we realize how much business is in everyday life. There is strong doubt that life would be the same without entrepreneurs. 
 
     Most businessmen are trying to suit the market and get profit, which sometimes adversely affects our health and entire life. For example, the addition of artificial components instead of natural ones, that can cause the consumers to obtain a higher risk of disease. The same holds true for manufacturing. It is known that some producers cut for quality material for cheaper material that can some the products longevity. A common saying for this kind of production is "Success is a concept measured in terms of money and time," which creates bad quality products for the general public.  

     The inventions, and cheap quality of products help these businessmen create profit.