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Life in Chad (2) —— Lovely girl in poverty If I ask you if you know what does a poorest country looks like, could you answer me with the true? For me, I have to say "No".I've never seen a poverty like this in Chad. Chad is almost the poorest country of the world in which the corruption is also the most serious. With a critical environnement, this inland country had seemed exist in an another world before I came here. Maybe you've heard this name —— N'djamena, yes, this is the capital of Chad, but I think you don't know that this city have a consumption level as high as in Tokyo, and it is ranged in the top ten of the world. Unimaginable! But that is the true. So it is not hard to imagine the life of the Chad's people.I took this photo when I was in a "market". She was lovelt, pure, I could even feel her innocence like a diamond. This touched me. The girl at her age should at school, playing with others rather than selling something in the market. The starry night here is wonderful, but under this wonder, there is a country totally different.

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Life in Chad (2) —— Lovely Girl In Poverty

 

If I ask you if you know what does a the poorest country looks like, could you answer me with the true truthfully? For me, I have to say "No". I've never seen a (the "a" is omitted) poverty like this in Chad. Chad is almost the poorest country of in the world in which the corruption is also the most serious. With a critical environnement, this inland landlocked country had seemed to exist in an another world before I came here. Maybe you've heard this the name N'djamena, yes, this is the capital of Chad, but I think you don't know that this city have has a consumption level as high as in Tokyo, and it is ranked in among the world's top ten of the world. Unimaginable! But that is the truth. So it is not hard to imagine the life of the Chad's Chadian people. I took this photo when I was in a "market". She was lovely, pure, I could even feel her innocence shining like a diamond. This touched me. The girl At her age, this girl should be at school, playing with others rather than selling something in the market. The starry night here is wonderful, but under beneath this wonder, there is a country totally different country.

 

Notes:

- "True" is an adjective, "truth" is the noun and "truthfully" is the adverb. Therefore we can say "a true friend", "tell the truth" and "answer someone truthfully". 

- "世界上" = "in the world"

- You can say either "the Chadian people" or "the people of Chad", both are fine and there's no difference in meaning between them.

- Be careful of mixing up your French and English, especially with words like "environment" that originally come from French! Languages aren't easy >_<

- I changed "under" to "beneath" just to avoid saying "under this wonder", which sounds a bit awkward.

 

This is a well-written and moving piece of work. Great job! 加油!

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I think it's "at the top ten". I correct for myself :)

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