Writing test in English

Hello everybody! I have to do a writing test in English for school. I must write a interview between a journalist and Brian Marley. Marley has won a adventure reality show and he is now famous, so I must write a interview about the changes in his life after winning. So, here you can see what I have written to begin with. The other part is to follow :

Today in our BBC studio we have the honor of welcoming the famous reality TV star, Brian Marley! Brian Marley became a celebrity after he won the reality show « Green Hell ». If you haven't watched the show, it is an adventure game. The aim of this reality show is to survive for a long period in difficult and dangerous living conditions in the forest and therefore to be the last survivor.

The journalist : Good morning Brian Marley! How are you today? Are you ready?

B.M. : Good morning everybody! I'm fine thank you. First, I would like to say that it's a pleasure for me to be here, I am very happy to answer your questions. So, yes I'm ready. We can begin.

The journalist : Could you tell us what life is like being a millionnaire? Could you tell us what you want to do with your award, this incredible amount of two million dollars?

B.M. : I must admit that this huge award has changed my life, I would like to do many things with  two million dollars. First, I can help my family and my friends, and spoil them, because they are very important to me. Then, I want to give half of this money to an association to help African children who are suffering from hunger. The cause of hunger has become more important to me because of my experience  in the reality show. I realise that African children feel hungry all the time, that's why I'd like to help them. Finally, I would like to travel around the world because travelling is my passion.

The journalist : Oh, that is a very generous and wonderful thing to do for African children. I'd like to know if your relationship with your family and friends has changed?

Can you correct me please? Thank you!

 
Today in our BBC studios we have the honor to welcome the famous reality tv star, Brian Marley! Brian Marley has become a celebrity because he won the reality show « Green Hell ». If you didn't watch the show, it is an adventure game, the aim of this reality show is to survive for a long period in difficult and dangerous living conditions in the forest, thereafter to be the last survivor.

The journalist : Good morning Brian Marley! How are you today? Are you ready?

B.M. : Good morning everybody! I'm fine thank you. First, I would like to say that it's a pleasure for me to be here, I am very happy to answer your questions. So, now that I'm ready, we can begin.

The journalist : Could you tell us what life is like being a millionnaire? Could you tell us what do you want to do with your award, the incredible amount of two million dollars?

B.M. : I must admit that this huge award has changed my life, I would like to do many things with this two million dollars. First, I can help and pamper my family and my friends because they are very important for me. Then, I want to give to an association half the money to help the African children, who suffer from hunger. The cause of hunger has become more important to me because of this adventure, I felt what African children feel all the time, that's why I'd like to help them. Finally, I would like to travel around the world because traveling is my passion.

The journalist : Oh, that's a very generous and beautiful act for the African children. I'd like to know if your relationship with your family and friends has changed?