I live in another place, instead of my home town.

When i I was young, about 4years old or so something, my father went to a place called Yunnan where which is far away from my home town, Hunan,.  hHe let my mother brought take me there, and i I grow grew up in Lijiang Yunnan,. tThere were many beautiful views there. Now i I am a student in university, and i I am from far away from my parents,. and only one chance i I can only meet them per once a year. I hope i I can get a good job when i I graduate from university.and so i I will can pay back to my parents back.
Thank you for correcting my mistakes in these sentences.

You must leave a space after full stops and commas. It is very hard to read English when there are not the right spaces. You must always write the word ‘I' using a capital letter, even if it is in the middle of a sentence. Make sure your tenses match throughout the whole sentence, and indeed throughout the whole piece. Also, be careful with plurals. 'These' means more than one, so you can not say 'these sentence', as sentence is singular. It must be in the plural, 'these sentences'.