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October 31. Romania. Transylvania.
According to legend, Transylvania appears in the form of shelter diverse evil, evil spirits and witches. This is a very dark area, which always prevail twilight terrain, full of ancient magic.
Our story begins here .. Bran - kind of gloomy castle , where on the eve of Halloween 's a brand new story.
action 1
Night. The estate of Count Dracula .
On stage is Dracula .
It turns out henchman .
AP - Master! Master! We have guests !
Dracula turning.
D. - Oh , yes! I was waiting for them .
P. - Yes boss, a guy and a girl. They have the car broke down .
D. - Excellent! I'll meet them . ( Makes a sinister look)
The vampire leaves , followed by the henchman ( grinning) .
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Dear friends! Help, please! Check my script. I need to write it in English.
October 31. Romania. Transylvania.
According to legend, Transylvania is presented as a place of shelter diverse evils, evil spirits, and witches. This is a very dark region, full of ancient magic, and in which twilight prevails.
Our story begins here .. Bran Castle - kind of a gloomy castle, where on the eve of Halloween a brand-new story begins.
Act 1
Night. The Estate of Count Dracula.
On stage is Dracula.
A servant approaches.
Servant: Master! Master! We have guests!
Dracula turns.
D. - Oh , yes! I was expecting them.
S. - Yes Master, a man and a woman. Their automobile has broken down.
D. - Excellent! I shall meet them. (Gives a sinister look)
The Vampire leaves, followed by the servant (grinning).
Do not leave spaces between a word and its punctuation. Correct: We have guests! Incorrect: We have guests !
As you know, Dracula was a count (граф), so I have made his speech more formal: I shall; automobile; Master (not "boss").
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