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my college life College life makes me “beautiful” Three years ago I went to the college with great passion and excitement. When I saw the sea and the peace、beauty of Yantai I felt all of the pain I have been through at my high school was finally worthwhile. The following year, I was dazzled by the gaiety and splendor of campus life: a serious of community activities, a sea of interesting courses, a number of funny friends, all of this definitely enrich my life and also broad my horizon. Every month I traveled to the different scenery. I ate various cates, I tried the things fresh. The college life as well as an fascinating unknown attract me to explore. At the next, I cut the classes, I failed in lessons. The students like me unable to self-control did everything by their will. Aimless life was corroded my ambition, makes me involved in corruption. I started to wonder the meaning of college. At that time “The letter to Chinese student” by Kai Fuli the course of lectures by teacher and schoolmate like a lighthouse lead me to right direction. My life was filled with English, with photography, photoshop , with certificated, with the things I was interested in and important to me. Eventually I succeed in passing the CET-6, I won the first award of photography, I design brand, poster for enterprises. I spared no effort to take advantage of every minute to study variety of certificates, to apply for intern post, to....All of this is just for a good job when I leave the campus can get. Time like a rolling wheel goes too quickly to catch up. It felt like in just the blink of an eye and I turn to a senior student and will graduate from university next year. Reviewing the life of college is just like happened at yesterday and appear before my eyes vividly. I regard it as a treasure and will keep it in my inner heart forever. This wonderful period makes me mature, confident, strong. All in a word: college life makes me “beautiful”.

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Hello! Good job. I can understand what you are trying to say. I will correct a few small errors in grammar, but it's already very good:

 

my college life

College life makes me “beautiful”

Just a note - "beautiful" (adjective) can be used to describe a person or a place. If you say "College life makes me beautiful", it sounds a bit strange. You could say, "College life makes my life beautiful." or "College life makes me feel beautiful." -- but this is usually something a woman would say, not a man :) I think what you mean to say is, "College life makes me feel great!", or "College life is beautiful!"


Three years ago I went to the college with great passion and excitement. When I saw the sea and the peace、, and the beauty of Yantai I felt all of the pain I have been through at my high school was finally worthwhile.
The following year, I was dazzled by the gaiety and splendor of campus life: a serious series of community activities, a sea of interesting courses, a number of funny friends, - all of this definitely enriched my life and also broadened my horizon. Every month I traveled to the different scenery. I ate various cates cakes, and I tried the things fresh fresh things / fresh food. The college life as well as an the fascinating unknown attract tempted me to explore.
At the next But / Unfortunately, I cut the classes, and I failed in lessons.

 

The students like me unable to self-control did everything by their will. Aimless life was corroded my ambition, makes me involved in corruption. I started to wonder the meaning of college.

^ This is a bit confusing. I think I understand what you are saying. This is how I would say it:

The students, who like me were unable to show self-control, did everything impulsively (= on impulse = no self-control). The aimless lifestyle corroded my abition, and I became involved in corruption. I started to wonder about the meaning of college.

 

*Sorry I have to stop now I have run out of time - I will finish later :)

 

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