My Perfect Day

Hi,everybody. This is the beginning of my composition entitled 'My Perfect Day'! (perfect day's composition !) I will try to describe (it) how (can) I (i) spent (spend on) this nice day. Hope everyone can correct my grammar. Thanks!

After China's long holiday, everything needed to return to normal. (all the things to be turned on the right way.). Of course , I(i) should work today and many interesting things happened on this Friday. I work(i worked) in a finance company and my job is in(!My job is) HR (Human Resources). I like my job because I (i)  can/have the opportunity to   interview many people (peoples) and discover (find) the good side to (other people's shining points in) their characters. Today, I interviewed (interview the) a girl who was applying for a position in sales. (,she was applied the sales!) When I (i) talked (talk) to her, I was surprised to find that she had (was) a stutter/stammered. I (i) thought (think) may be it would (its maybe) be hard for her to do this job because/given a (the) salespersons (best seller's) basic requirement is to possess (have the) good elocution. (skill of eloquence.) When I (i) pointed (point) that out (that),she said that's why she chose (choose) to do this job. Firstly, (First) she loved the (this) job and (she) wanted (want) to overcome her shortcomings (the shortage) when in contact (she contact) with (wiz) people. She told me that it may be (its maybe) hard for her at first,but she thought (think) she would eventually(will be) succeed. She told me that she practised (practice) her pronunciation every day(everyday) and nothing would (can) stop her from bettering herself. (moving!) I admired her courage and (I) think she will be the future (next) Zhang Heidi. ( in future!)  Above all, I think it's been a (the) perfect day today. Meeting this girl and seeing so much (Many) positive energy (energies) flowing from her has inspired (to encourages) me to (do) better myself as a person in the future.

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