Patience

Yesterday, I felt like passing out. It was because I had studied for a long time at school.
On my way home, I asked myself: "Am I satisfied with my current life?" 

Certainly, I already knew the answer.

I am never annoyed at studying for such a long time, though most of my friends complain about it.
I don't think it is very hard. Although the professor asked us too much asks (asked) too much from us, I don't hate him.
It is all because I think I am going through a rite of passage.

If I can achieve my dream so easily, it is not anymore a dream anymore.
Everyone is supposed to go through pain to embody make their dream and ideals worth it.
So, I think my fatigue is so natural. I think it is a kind of sign when I try something that I have been working hard.
Of course, I want to sleep more and talk with friends more, but I need to have a patience in order to get what I want.

Then, am I really trying to achieve my dream?

I said I already knew the answer of to my first question.
It is NO because I am trying not for my absolute goal, but for just rather just for the grade.
If I tried so this hard for my own dream, I would be very happy,
But, I don't think my current study is so related to my absolute goal.
So, I am not satisfied with my current life.
But, that's not to say that I don't like my life.
Although it is not related to my dream, I think it is one of the obstacles I should overcome.
In other words, I must have patience to do the direct things directly related to my dream.

Tomorrow, I will finally finish this teamwork group assignment. I don't won't need to stay up until late at school anymore.
I have done my best. I hope it will get a suitable reward (You may also say "I hope it was worth it").

Above all, I will be able to read again from starting tomorrow evening. It is one step towards my for my absolute dream.
I will go to a bookstore. I can't wait for tomorrow. I can't wait for tomorrow because I will get to go to a bookstore.

민주, 영어 잘해요! 공부열심히해요! 화이팅~

(P.S. Sorry if my Korean is pretty bad, I am just starting haha..)

Patience

Yesterday, I felt like passing out. It was because I studied for a long time at school.
On my way home, I asked myself: am I satisfied with my current life?

Certainly,Of course, I already knew the answer. (also, if you say "I certainly knew the answer", it has a little bit of an ironic/sarcastic tone like you're poking fun at yourself)

I am'm never annoyed at having to studying for such a long time, though most of my friends complain about it.
I don't think it isit's very hard. Although the professor askedasks us too much from us, I don't hate him.
It is all because I think I am going through a rite of passage.

If I can could achieve my dream so (that) easily, it is not anymore wouldn't be a dream anymore.
Everyone is supposed to go through/endure pain to embody their dream and ideals.
So, I think my fatigue is sovery natural. I think it isit's a kind of a sign when I try something hardof effort/of hard work/of working hard/trying to achieve something hard. (if you say "it's kind of a", you should use "that")
Of course, I want to sleep more and talk with my friends more, but I need to have a the patience to get what I want.

Then, am I trying to achieve my dream? ("Then am I trying to achieve my dream?" without the comma means you're saying if you do all that work, would that mean you are achieving your dream? you are questioning all of this work... maybe you intended to say: "after all that,","after all is said and done" or you could cut out "then".)

I said that I already know the answer of to my first question.
It is NO.
That's because, I am trying, not forin order to achieve my absolute goal, but for just to get the grade.
If I tried that so hard for my own dream, I would be very happy, .
But, I don't think my studystudies are is so that related to my absolute goal.
So, I'm am not satisfied with my current life.
But, that'sIt's not that I don't like my life.
Although It is notisn't related to my dream, I think it is one of the obstacles I should need to overcome.
In other words, I have the patience to do the direct things related to my dream.

Tomorrow, I'll will finally finish this teamwork. I don't need to stay up until late at school anymore.
I've have done my best. I hope it will gets a suitable reward.

Above all, I'll will be able to read again from tomorrow evening. It's is one step for towards my absolute dream.
I will go to a bookstore. I can't wait for tomorrow.

Hi Min! It looks like I corrected a lot but there aren't as many as it looks. It's because I wondered if I should correct for contractions ie. I'll, we'll we're, isn't it's, etc. To really sound fluent, it's good to keep the formality consistent throughout. In informal writing, it's typical to use contractions like it's, not "it is". In formal writing, like in business or school writing, you should use "it is" and never use contractions. When you use formal language in casual writing like this, I think, would be if you're trying to make a point. For example, "It isn't my dream, but it IS one of the things I must overcome". When someone says it out loud, the IS would be emphasized and the reader also reads it like that. So when you say casually: "I will overcome!" instead of "I'll overcome!" The first is a strong statement, it sounds like a declaration. These are the sentences I kept when I corrected. The second actually sounds really awkward if you read or spoke it aloud, it sounds like it needs something extra added like "I'll overcome it all!"

I wrote a lot because I think it's important to know what the thought is behind the writing. I hope you don't mind! ^^ I do think your writing is very good and I don't think you need much effort to make it perfect.