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if I should have a daughter(part2) When my baby girl grows up, when she starts to complain about things around like why our neighbor’s garden looks better than ours, I would tell her that beauty is not about how the world is arranged; it’s about how you arrange your mind, so nourish your heart with appreciation and tolerance and see the world with an open mind. I would be on her side when she locks herself in the room, streaming with tears, after her stupid puppy love left and comfort her with no words but a hug and tell her not to be afraid to love, because finding someone you love is the most wonderful thing you can ever imagine. She would not be restrained from being proud of herself, but “baby”, I will tell her ”don’t keep your nose in the air like that, because no matter how long you stretch your fingers, there is always a high possibility that someone stronger than you will bear away the trophy which only belongs to the first.”But “honey, you don’t have to inch your way to the mountain top if it goes against your mind and don’t be afraid to be different because that’s how your mom fought her way out.” Dear daughter, I would put chocolate in your mouth and tell you to experience the thick, sweet melting because that subtle content sensation is what you should remember all the time. I will allow you to possess plenty of dreams even if they can only be fancy because without dreams, life is like a broken-winged bird that cannot fly. When snow blankets the earth, you can pile up snow and make it your slide if you want. When the grass carpets the ground like a cushion, it’s nice to roll on the weeds. When mom disappears a thousand years later, don’t panic, my dear, because love is always there.

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If I should have a daughter(part2)

When my baby girl grows up, when she starts to complain about things around like why our neighbor’s garden looks better than ours, I will tell her that beauty is not about how the world is arranged; it’s about how you arrange your mind, so nourish your heart with appreciation and tolerance and see the world with an open mind. I would be on her side when she locks herself in the room, streaming with tears, after her stupid puppy love left, and comfort her with no words, but rather a hug and tell her not to be afraid to love, because finding someone you love is the most wonderful thing you can ever imagine. She will not be restrained from being proud of herself, but “baby”, I will tell her ”don’t keep your nose in the air like that, because no matter how long you stretch your fingers, there is always a high possibility that someone stronger than you will bear away the trophy which only belongs to the first place." ”But “honey, you don’t have to inch your way to the mountain top if it goes against your beliefs and don’t be afraid to be different because that’s how your mom fought her way out.”
Dear daughter, I will put chocolate in your mouth and tell you to experience the thick, sweet melting because that subtle content sensation is what you should remember all the time. I will allow you to possess plenty of dreams, even if they can only be fancy because without dreams, life is like a broken-winged bird that cannot fly. When snow blankets the earth, you can pile up snow and make it your slide if you want. When the grass carpets the ground like a cushion, it’s nice to roll on the weeds. When mom disappears a thousand years later, don’t panic, my dear, because love is always there.

 

[Excellent.  I changed the tense.  You could have said either 'would' or 'will', but it must remain the same tense throughout the whole passage.  For the record, I think Michael's comment is awful.  Just my opinion.]

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Oh, my god, Are you really a Chinese ? Do you know if you under 22 years old and have a baby, you just have already violated the law.

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