Exercise: Pros and Cons of Young Adults' Volunteering

QUESTION:

Young adults should undertake unpaid work to help people in the community. Do you think it brings more drawbacks to the community and the young adults than benefits.

ANSWER:

In many communities, some young adults volunteer to help their neighbours without paying compensation. I believe this is very beneficial to their communities, and do not think there can be this can be of any harm to the communities. As for the young people themselves, I am not sure if every one of them gets more benefit than drawbacks from their contribution the benefits outweight the costs of their contributions.

Communities in general face a lot of problems every day, and they which need a considerable amount of efforts effort to handle. These range from clearing the litter, taking care of the young, the old the elderly, or even pets when their owners are on a holiday, to patroling for better security. If a community needs to hire professionals to do all these this work, it can be very costly, and few residents would pay for them. But if young volunteers can do them, a remarkable great deal of money can be saved.

Some people argue that by doing community work, young people do not only help their communities, but also help themselves. This is because young adults usually do not have enough experience to be competent professionals or workers for their future employers. Doing volunteering jobs helps them to get more practical experience.

However, there are some reasons against this view point point of view. Though they are encouraged to do so for the sake of their communities, it is not always the best choice for every young adult. One of the most important reasons is that volunteering is no substitute for real working experience in a company, where they can practice their specialised knowledge and skills. Moreover, community work needs takes a lot of time. If they young adults can spend the time on their studies, it might be more rewarding to for most many of them.

In conclusion, I believe that young volunteers do a lot of good to for their communities. But whether it is beneficial to the volunteers themselves is yet to be discussed ascertained/seen.

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