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And Again About Education

Today the number of well-educated people is quckly growing fast all over the world. Although some people argue that this occurrence is a consequence of broader existing opportunities for getting an education, others disagree with on the opinion that in order to be competitive, one has to graduate from a university. Both opinions will be discussed in this essay.

It is certainly true that education has become more available and less expensive over the last few decades. For example, education is absolutely free in some developed countries, such as Sweden and Finland, although this is true only for citizens and people from the EU. However, many Master’s and PhD programs as well as PhD are funded by governments and other social non-profit organizations, and those grants are available to everyone. Thus, the possibility to matriculate in a highly-ranked university, and to obtain a scholarship covering living expenses, increases the number of students; and as a consequence, the number of educated people grows as well.

In contrast to what has been mentioned above, the main reason for the increased interest in obtaining a better education is the more intense competition for jobs. Nowadays, students have many opportunities to do short internships or to obtain half-time jobs at the same time they are studying.  This enhances their qualifications, and gives them a competitive advantage at the time of graduation.  Another reason for the increased intersest in better education is that the appearance of the internet in the second half of last century simplified getting a self-education in times (?? "in times" is hard to understand.  Sorry, I don't know what you mean.).

To conclude, I am of the opinion that even though more and more people are obtaining an education in universities, this is occurring not only because they want to become better qualified, but is also due to the availability of more opportunities. Furthermore, a graduation diploma from a university is usually not enough to be competitive, whereas work experience and internships are more valuable for this purpose.

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