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What is the happiness?
What is the concept of happiness in your mind? Are you happy at the moment? Sometimes I am wondering about that-whether I am happy or not? With a lot of people in this world, they were borned with a normal body with all completely hands, feet, eyes and to them, that is happiness. With other people, they were borned into a family with both father and mother and that is happiness. And there are avast definition about happiness in all minds of other people in the world. All people arround The people surrounding/around me, I realize the people around me that they are only happy when they have a lot of money to be spending in their favorite(American English)/favourite(British English) things such as: a nice dress, a vacation trip, own a smart phone and so on.
I know one thing that everyone tries to study or work hard in order to have a good life.
The sentence in purple made no sense! Toi khong hieu! Do you mean "I know everybody tries to study hard or work hard in order to have a good life." <that one?>
And only they have enough finance to experience to their life will they feel happiness. In my opinion, the concept “happiness” is there are goals to purposes. There are love ones to love and to be loved without the empharize of effect of money. I really admire the foreigners because of their kind, intelligent and thinking, specially in their culture. They are willing to help other people, they do charity and willing to present all of properties to people who are unfortune in their life. For example, the abandoned children were by their parents or the poor people in poor countries.
I think the biggest happiness which they will receive can’t account, can’t calculate by the number.
Or sometimes, happiness simply is your behavior to other people around you without trying to don’t hurt anyone also helping other ones in your ability. Happiness is not a too big definition except you think too hard. Do you wait for achieving your goal, will you be happy? Or, do you wait until you are a rich person, you will happy? I don’t want to wait for a long time in order to be happy. When I finish this essay, I will be happy. And you? I wish you always feel happiness in one moment in your life.
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RULE #1: ALWAYS CAPTILIZE YOUR "I"
EXAMPLE: I WENT TO THE STORE. I HAD BREAKFAST. I WILL BE HAPPY.
RULE #2: MAKE SURE TO RE-READ YOUR SENTENCES. YOU WERE MISSING SMALL WORDS LIKE: BE, FOR, A,
ADVISE: USE THE WORDS: ALSO <IT IS A SYNONYM TO "AND">
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